Talk:Uremic pericarditis

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What?

Cam somebody add something to this entry that a lay person can understand? This is all well and good, but it reads like an entry from a medical school textbook. Seriously: "The etiology is poorly understood." That's as dry and arcane as my writing "For a stable system, all of the poles must lie in the left-half plane." (If you want to understand the meaning of that, see BIBO Stability.) So, instead of writing about etiology, rewrite with some actual words that lay people understand such as "The causation of the disease (etiology) is poorly understood." "Etiology" is a fine technical word, but any reader who is not a physician or biologist (which is the vast majority of Wikipedia readers) is not going to know what that term means and will need to look it up thus disrupting the flow of the article. While it is important to have references to terms, it is also important for articles to be readable and flow well with minimal distractions such as having to look up etiology.

192.249.47.211 (talk) 00:07, 4 December 2015 (UTC)