User talk:SarahK86/sandbox

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Not many things to say. Overall, great contribution. Points are clear and supported by evidence. Maybe mention the context (were women legally prohibited from smoking, was it just another patriarchal social norm) to prove how radical her actions were. Also was she mocking her gender, that is how women acted according to male-imposed norms? or was she mocking the very idea of gender (for example the way each sex dresses)? I would perhaps take out the "which is very interesting to see" which does not really add anything. The last paragraph is really good, maybe just restructure the sentence that starts with "Freedom is seen" and don't use "thing".