User talk:Olo 07/sandbox
I read over the article that you and your group are editing and you are correct it is a very short essay. I do not know what you and your group are planning to do to expand the article but I think what you started with is a good start. I would just make sure you include the history of the organization as well as telling where it is now. For your section. I would recommend more details about who was leading the organization when it began what were the initiatives that the organization had. Be sure to remain factual and not opinionated. Overall, I think it is a good start but it needs much more information and alternation sections to really describe the topic. Thomasonmariah (talk) 00:59, 11 November 2016 (UTC)
Your proposed edit is a good start, but it is very brief and there is a lot of room to add more information. As we have learned in WST 378, not all feminist people and organizations advocate for the same thing. We have learned that white, middle class Western feminists often ignored the ways in which women of color were oppressed differently. For example, the metaphor of the “waves” positions abortion as a key issue for feminists, while ignoring the fact that, for many women of color who have been sterilized against their will, the right to have children holds more importance.
In the case of feminism in Chile, it would be interesting to discuss how the different organizations agreed and/or disagreed, as well as the specific strategies they employed. It is likely that the upper and middle class women of Círculo de Lectura de Senoras advocated for different issues than would feminist organizations of lower class women. In the original wiki article, it is noted that the Consejo Nacional was formed by more progressive women, desiring tangible community activism rather than the solely intellectual work of the more conservative Women’s Reading Club. Distinctions like these are important because they reflect local and national tensions within a complex political landscape.
Also, the list of women’s organizations could use some more detail. What specific legal rights did women in SERNAM advocate for? What strategies did the Women’s studies circle use to break through as one of the first women’s organizations, despite the potential negative consequences they likely faced?
I also noticed that the source you cited was already cited in the original Wiki article. Although you could certainly find more information from this source, I would encourage you to find completely new sources with a different perspective. WST Student (talk) 06:23, 17 November 2016 (UTC)
Olivia, make sure your citations have the actual journal title and issue, rather than just the link through JSTOR, which people may not be able to follow.Drlmanderson (talk) 16:16, 5 December 2016 (UTC)