User talk:Laughsassin/New Sandbox

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I see that you've kept the original lead and that's great because it's easy to understand. The lead gives a good overview of the rest of the article as well since it doesn't get too bogged down in detail and gives the reader the main points. The lead tells me where the manuscript is at which is at the Getty Museum, where it comes from (France), and where I can find it now (online). I can see that you've added eight new sections from the original Wikipedia page and it makes the page so much stronger. The original wiki page had a section titled "the works" which didn't really fit so good job on the clear structure. There are 3 sections (Modern times, Texts and script, and Purpose) that need more expansion in order to have balanced coverage but the rest of the sections have a good amount of information. The phrase "She was one of the most powerful women" in the history section doesn't sound neutral as well. I believe the one citation at the end of the history section can be rewritten. Overall, add more sources so you can strengthen the article and enrich the material but it does look so much better than the original Wikipedia page. Great job! Gabyflores27 (talk) 17:01, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]