User talk:LakshmiMod/sandbox
Hi Lakshmi!
I am reviewing your page as of 15 March 2017 21:50 CET. In case you made any changes after I post my comments, let me know and I'll be happy to review again!
What does the article (or section) do well? The article presents the facts are they are. It is not biased and lays out the topic of cyber security clearly. It pulls from legitimate sources to back up its claims. For somebody who does not know anything about cyber security (such as myself), I believe that it includes a good brief on what the topic is about today and brings the reader up to speed on the current happenings in cyber security.
What changes would you suggest overall? Although I can assume that the field of cyber security is relatively new, the article does not touch on the history of cyber security standards. Perhaps if there were a quick timeline of how cyber security have evolved throughout the years, this would provide a good background for readers to understand the development of this field. I feel as if other Wiki articles usually provide a quick history summary or overview section to discuss the development ( for example, check out this Wiki's development section)
Also, Brexit was mentioned briefly in the context of how they will adapt cyber security standards (and also the US), but then the article solely focused on EU cyber security standards. Perhaps you could expand on the US and UK's viewpoints on cyber security, or if you are not interested in including more details about these two changing the article title to focus on "Cyber security standards in the EU."
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I believe that the most important thing you can do is organize your writing. By adding in some titles, headers, and bullet points between the sections you can better formulate your Wiki so that the reader can understand the flow of your article better.
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I liked how concise your Wiki is. This is something I definitely want to implement in my article.
Schmids (talk) 21:18, 15 March 2017 (UTC)
HI Scott! Thanks for your comments they are really appreciated. I did not focus my article on the history of cyber security regulations because I am adding on to a previously written article. My focus was on the EU but thanks for your input! Perhaps I will see if I can update the history section of that article. I also took the time to make some visual changes. Thank you! LakshmiMod (talk) 14:00, 6 April 2017 (UTC)Lakshmi
Hi Lakshmi,
What does the article (or section) do well? As Scott mentioned, this article effectively explains the basic concepts of cyber security that are necessary to understand the article. You also do a good job of presenting facts as neutrally as possible and the reader gets the sense that they are getting the whole picture of the current state of cyber security - not just a slice. Great stuff!
What changes would you suggest overall? It would be interesting to have a bit more background information pertaining to how these governmental organizations were created. Personally, I would find it very interesting to see who has supported and who has fought against increased cyber security regulation. It would also help the reader get a better picture of all of the players involved in creating what we see today.
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? Reading the article without headings and subheadings makes it harder to follow but this is only a minor cosmetic change that I a sure you have saved for your next draft.
Overall, a very well written and informative article!
ZiyadNour (talk) 23 March, 2017 —Preceding undated comment added 22:05, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
Thanks Ziyad for your input! I decided not to talk about the politic behind cyber security regulations because that would be a whole other section. I will definitely see though if there is a place in the original article that was written for me to contribute such content. Thanks again! LakshmiMod (talk) 14:00, 6 April 2017 (UTC)Lakshmi