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Sources for 2-XL Article
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- The sources look goood, but you should post them to the sandbox, not the talk page. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:39, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
Open Section for Geography of Montreal
Montreal is a city located in the province of Quebec in Canada. The Geography of Montreal is very diverse. Montreal contains two rivers, and 10 geographical regions. There are four distinct seasons in Montreal, each with different temperatures and weather. The levels of sunshine and precipitation vary with each season annually. The citizens of Montreal also have a unique way of determining directions. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eshire1 (talk • contribs) 16:05, 28 October 2015 (UTC)
- Your draft should be in the sandbox. Reserve the talk page for comments. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:35, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
- The draft is a good start. I recommend these changes: 1. Where in Canada is Quebec - north, south, east, west? Add that info to the first sentence. 2. Geography is lower-case. 3. How exactly do the levels of sunshine and precipitation differ? Either make this more specific or leave it out. 4. How do the citizens determine directions? Don't leave us hanging. There is no place for suspense in an encyclopedia. Once you make those changes, proofread and post the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:35, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
Revised Lead Section
Montreal is a city located in the southwest province of Quebec in Canada. The geography of Montreal is very diverse. Montreal contains two rivers, and 10 geographical regions. There are four distinct seasons in Montreal, each with different temperatures and weather. The levels of sunshine and precipitation vary with the summer being the sunniest and 40 inches of precipitation throughout the year. The citizens of Montreal also have a unique way of determining directions related to the two rivers and saying 'up and down' instead of North and South. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2620:105:B00B:4125:3516:325D:A7CD:B7C0 (talk) 18:38, 2 November 2015 (UTC)