User talk:Delvine101/sandbox

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Hey there!

It looks like you're making some solid contributions to this article! My main critique would be that some of the language you include could be seen as more editorial in style than objective (e.g. "Brownmiller's idea about victim blaming was supposed to shed on light rape myths"). In some places such as the example I pulled, your language can also be a bit on the figurative side, which does a little bit to interfere with clarity for those who require more concrete descriptions. Overall though, everything seems to be looking good so far! Keep up the good work, because I'm sure the other sections you intend to edit will be done well, too! RCLU12 (talk) 21:12, 15 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hey girl! I really enjoyed how you further expanded on the information that was already there and made definitions more clear such as what the term "rape culture" really entailed. You have really done a greta job of contributing info to the article so far! Ghmcinnes (talk) 00:46, 22 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]