User talk:Ajsway/sandbox
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You could break up the awards to make it easier to read, and the career section starts with the word "retiring" which is a bit confusing. Also the career section could be more neutral, specifically the last sentence. There's also some redundancy in the intro and the career section. Dinosaurtat (talk) 18:29, 28 November 2017 (UTC)