User talk:AAman45/sandbox

Review:

I like how you changed some of the passive sentences to active. What I tend to do is if I'm writing a video game article, I pull out a complete and famous video game page and mimic the Sections, like History, Gameplay, etc... I'm not going to check grammar and spelling, if you want help on that, I recommend copying everything and pasting on microsoft word, it works for me.

Questions: Introduction

• I understand that "501(c)(3)" is what the website states but I don't know what it means, a lot of people probably won't.
• Your article claims that "It is the largest membership organization", it's a bold statement and a citation to that specific statistic is needed or it'll be viewed as an advertising statement.
• The second and third paragraph should be it's own section like ==History==, an intro is suppose to be a summary
• I think you could add an infobox, it would help make the page look nicer, with it all being text only

State Arbor Day Dates

• This is a very long line of information, I think its alright but it'll be cool if theres another way to represent this. Its fine by its own though, just a suggestion. Also "California – March 7-14" can be changed to second week of march to match the format of the rest.

For me, this page has a lot of text, I think an infobox and images might break it up and look better. Other than that, it's pretty solid. And make sure to look at other similar organizations to see how they structure their page if you haven't already. Good Luck! Yihengsong (talk) 19:18, 4 November 2015 (UTC)