User:Sewinginthepast

Article Problems

Art and World War II

Lead Section

• More intro than summary
• Too much information
• Not concise; doesn’t overview topic
• Needs images
• Only 1 citation
• Page title not in first sentence
• Link to WWII & art sooner
• More encyclopedic

Layout Problems

• Sections are in confusing order
• Suggested new sections:
  • Destruction of Art
  • War-Inspired Art
  • Artists in the War
• Within new sections, there can be more accessible subsections (with info in current sections)

Content Problems

• Original research/personal essay style needs to be altered (especially in first section)
• Needs more images throughout article
• Add more citations throughout
• Style needs to be more neutral

Horrible Histories (book series)

Lead Problems

• Good lead overall
• Last paragraph unnecessary (can be a section later on)
• Needs info box

Layout Problems

• Not sure if the lists and lists of books is necessary for this specific article (separate page?)
• Not enough subsections
• Development & Approach sections could potentially be combined (Concept & Creation?)
• New section about publication history (move Translations section & other content here)
• Add Awards as a subsection in the Reception section

Content Problems

• The excessive Reception section needs to be condensed.
• Some copyediting required throughout – grammar, spelling, style, tone, and similar errors.
• Original research/personal essay style & subjective tones need to be altered

Junie B. Jones

Lead Problems

• Needs more in the info box
• Needs images
• Needs more information in lead paragraph to be considered a summary

Layout Problems

• Too much time spent on character descriptions (new page for characters?)
• Missing a number of sections on series creation, reception, publication history, etc.

Content Problems

• Some copyediting required throughout – grammar, spelling, style, tone, and similar errors.
• References need to be added in a majority of the character analyses.
• Some excessive and unnecessary details need to be condensed.
• More general info about the book series, in general, needs to be added.

Articles Needing Improvement

Coffee Cake

• Article flagged as needing more citations
• Article needs to be verified
• Article is lacking quite a bit of content

Bird Food

• Article flagged as needing changes in tone
• Article seems to casual
• Article's layout needs to be reorganized