Template:Did you know nominations/Tetrasomy X

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The result was: promoted by MeegsC (talk) 20:57, 7 May 2021 (UTC)

Tetrasomy X

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Karyotype of tetrasomy X

• ... that when the first woman diagnosed with tetrasomy X (chromosomes pictured) was followed up 26 years later, she had gone from residence in an institution to living freely with her sister? Source: Berg JM, Karlinsky H, Korossy M, Pakula Z (1988). "Twenty-six years later: a woman with tetra-X chromosomes". Journal of Mental Deficiency Research. 32 (1): 67–74. doi:10.1111/j.1365-2788.1988.tb01389.x. PMID 3361607.

• Reviewed: Did you know nominations/Paul Jackson (bassist)
• Comment: Couple of points:
  • "Happily" is not explicitly called in-article (wrong formality register for an article, imo) but fairly clear from the source; it's a bit of a long hook and I can't think of another way to get across the whole 'life improvement' concept without going way over the character limit (advice is welcome)
  • 'Chromosomes pictured' is, I think, an awkward wording, but the formal term ('karyotype') is definitely going to be unclear to most readers -- again, advice welcome on what to do here

Improved to Good Article status by Vaticidalprophet (talk). Self-nominated at 12:29, 8 April 2021 (UTC).

• The article is long enough and new enough. I assume good faith on the references that I can't access. A QPQ has been completed. The hook and image are both fine. SL93 (talk) 22:03, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

• Just a suggestion, if "happily" isn't in the article or explicit in the source: "freely" might be easily verifiable/obvious (the literal information it conveys is that she was not in an institution) and also have the right connotation. — Bilorv (talk) 00:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)

• Good suggestion, I've edited the hook accordingly. Vaticidalprophet 00:21, 7 May 2021 (UTC)

what did you people do, you didn't even settle on a hook. it should definitely be "after", rather than "instead", besides, neither the article or the hook specifies what kind of institution it was. 37.225.38.158 (talk) 10:33, 11 May 2021 (UTC)