Talk:Tornado outbreak of Leap Day 1952/GA1

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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 21:50, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this nomination, comments are below and nomination is on hold. This was an interesting read! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 21:50, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Lead/infobox

  • Already linked in the infobox, but I'd link tornado outbreak in the first sentence of the lead as well.
    •  Done
  • Might be slightly unneeded, but it wouldn't hurt to link USD in the lead.
    •  Done
  • The infobox image caption needs a comma after "Tennessee" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
    •  Done
  • Could you expand the lead a bit, perhaps with a few more sentences? A small synopsis of the F3 and F4 tornadoes would be helpful since those were the two most severe storms of the outbreak.
    •  Done
  • Expanded lead sounds good - I added one comma myself and only have one fix to make: "On the north side of Fort Payne, Alabama, an F3 tornado caused major damage in Fort Payne, Alabama" → This sentence repeats the parts in bold and lacks a period.

Meteorological synopsis

Confirmed tornadoes

  • Is there a need for the subheader "February 29 event"? All of the storms occurred on that day, and the article is titled accordingly, so I'm not sure this header is needed since there isn't any use in differentiating storms that occurred on different days.
  • Note 2 says that the average width (I'm assuming as opposed to the maximum width) was recorded for storms prior to 1994; does this conflict with the "max width" column in the table?
  • I'm sure this is probably standardized across tornado articles, but is there a need to keep "parish" in the column header, since no storms occurred in Louisiana?

Additional Note: I just added some Grazulis data into the table and section. If you want to look that over, you can. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 15:44, 19 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Fayetteville, Tennessee

  • "Downtown Fayetteville" → "downtown Fayetteville" since the article is about the city, not the downtown specifically
    •  Done
  • "NWS Huntsville says the tornado travelled 7 miles (11 km)" → I think this would fit better in a footnote, especially because of the double parentheses. I'd also link National Weather Service to "NWS"
  • "Of the 1,828 buildings in Fayetteville, 932 were damaged or destroyed, including 244 destroyed homes and other buildings and 360 other damaged homes and buildings. In all, 139 homes were destroyed, 152 had major damage, and another 164 sustained minor damage." → bolded section seems unnecessary to me since the exact number of destroyed and damaged homes are given in the next sentence.
    •  Done
  • "...six churches alone in Downtown Fayetteville were estimated..." → lowercase "downtown"
    •  Done
  • "Several business houses were..." → is there a reason semicolons are used in this sentence instead of commas?
    •  Done
  • expand "CDNS", and link if the organization has an article (I can't check as I don't know what this stands for)
    •  Done
  • expand ">$3 million" to "over $3 million"
    •  Done
  • add comma after "Illinois" per GEOCOMMA
    •  Done

Fort Payne, Alabama

Non-tornadic impacts

  • link hail
    •  Done
  • "The squall line moved rapidly eastward, passing over Lovell Field at 8:17 pm and capsizing several small aircraft." → the term "capsizing" strikes me as a nautical term as opposed to an aviation one. Is this the case or do the sources use the term "capsizing"?
  • "Hailstones of approximately 3⁄4 inch (1.9 cm) in diameter" → remove bolded word
  • comma after "Monteagle, Tennessee"
    •  Done
  • "Additional, but light, damage also occurred outside..." → can be simplified to "Additional light damage also occurred outside..." or "Light damage also occurred outside..."
    •  Done
  • specify link to Southeastern Pennsylvania (which redirects to Delaware Valley)
    •  Done
  • "...with the heaviest snow in the southern part of it." → I'd simplify to "in the south" and link that to South Jersey
    •  Done
  • "One person was killed, and 10 others were injured" → remove comma
    •  Done
  • "mid/late-afternoon" → "mid- to late afternoon", since "mid-afternoon" is commonly hyphenated but "late afternoon" is not
    •  Done
  • "Air Force" → link to United States Air Force
    •  Done
  • comma after "Newberry, South Carolina"
    •  Done

Aftermath and historical significance

Notes and references

  • Ref No. 2 does not take me to a specific publication but rather to a page where you can select a publication to view; can you update this to target the publication used to source the statements in the article? When you update that, also make sure to update the website parameter to display the full name of the website or its organization rather than the URL (as with the point below)
    •  Done I changed it to a Google Book ref of the CDNS report. The CDNS site does indeed lead to the publication selection page, but the publication on this site are PDF links that I'm pretty sure expire. This seems like an effective alternative though. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 09:19, 19 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • update websiteparameter for ref No. 3 to display National Weather Service
    •  Done
  • Ref 6: Is there a better source for this statement than "Facts Just for Kids"? I'm not questioning the validity of the source or the statement, just that there is probably a more reputable or reliable source out there for this statement.
    •  Not done I actually had 2 refs for this. The other one was from the Tornado History Project, but that site went down around January 2021. This is the only other ref I could find. I could link it to the SPC WCM page, but that goes to an excel page. I will work to find another ref, but for now, this ref will have to stay. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 08:18, 19 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "links" can be lowercase in the section header; all good other than that.
    •  Done
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