Talk:The Two Roses/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 15:23, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Going to take a look at this article soon. good888 (talk) 15:23, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Lead section

• "The film focuses on the young Tony Prolo who goes to deliver lunch to his father, Tony Prolo." Might as well rewrite to: "The film focuses on the young Tony Prolo who goes to deliver lunch to his father of the same name."

Plot

• "The father, Tony Prolo, greets his young son and happily takes his lunch." Rewrite to: "The father, also called Tony Prolo, greets his young son and happily takes his lunch." or something similar.

Production

• "The film director is unknown, two Thanhouser directors are possible." Rewrite to: "The film director is unknown, but two Thanhouser directors are possible."

That's all I can find. On hold for now. good888 (talk) 10:37, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

@Good888: All set. I also tightened the wording in the plot a bit more. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:48, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Promoting to GA class! good888 (talk) 19:39, 10 March 2015 (UTC)