Talk:Shelby Gem Factory/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 21:18, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
Review in progress
This article is being put on a 7-day hold.
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Copy changes
- There are numerous locations in the article that need tense changing to reflect the 2019 closure (e.g. is → was). This is probably the single largest content issue on the page.
History
- Jo Kelly should be Kelley.
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:18, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Second paragraph could stand to be less choppy.
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:08, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Factory
- Remove the emdash in the second sentence.
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Comma after "theater"
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Set off "by then" in commas and then make "off limits" hyphenated
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Gem manufacturing
- Consider combining the second and third sentences.
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:20, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Other items
- I feel like there is something missing. Why did the factory close? How did the business evolve over the years? I'd love to know that but don't get that from this.
Done
- Watch tone in a few places which feels a touch promotional or overly positive.
Done
- Earwig mostly catches quotes in the article.
Done
- Practically every reference is archived.
Done
- Lots of great photos (some taken by Kelley in 2003!) which are all suitable for use. Some images do need alt tags.
Done
Comments
- @Sammi Brie: Thanks for review. I'll start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:21, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:43, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Doug Coldwell: Almost there (made a few minor cleanup changes). This sentence I'd excise for tone:
The factory's FAQ said "our rubies and sapphires are really ruby and sapphire!"
Ping me when that is removed and I think this can be promoted. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:28, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: =
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:35, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: =
- @Doug Coldwell: Almost there (made a few minor cleanup changes). This sentence I'd excise for tone: