Talk:Rachel Weisz/GA1

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:56, 2 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please respond to my concerns at your convenience by starting a new line below each concern. I will striket my concerns as they are resolved.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:47, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • I feel a bit of wanting for this subject. The article starts "Rachel Hannah Weisz . . . is an English film and theatre actress and fashion model." The article says nothing more than "During the final years in school, she started modelling." which is misspelled by the way. Is there any chance of finding any information about this part of her career? Who did she model for back then? Is she a current spokesperson for any fashion or cosmetics companies?
  • The article talks about her roots in theatre. Has she done any theatre work since college in West End or on Broadway. A quick scan at www.ibdb.com yields an award for The Shape of Things, which is mentioned in the article. However, in the filmography section, I think theatre work should either be separated or noted in the notes column. It is difficult for the lazy reader to determine her stage work.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:23, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • In general, I find my self looking at the various roles and thinking, was she any good at this or that. Many actor biographies start to become flush with critical commentary at about the time the quality level gets to GA. We know there are a lot of critical reviews that you are not mentioning. You may want to present those rather than just run through her roles.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:23, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I worked on that aspect adding the critical acclaim for her oscar-winning performance in The Constant Gardener and for The Whistleblower--Gunt50 (talk) 21:54, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
WP:LEAD
Early life and background
1992 - 1998
1999 - 2003
2004 ‐ 2009
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:26, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The same year, she rejected the offer participate in the The Mummy: Tomb of the Dragon Emperor due to script issues, The role was portrayed by Maria Bello." is runon.
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:26, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:26, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
2010 ‐present
  • The film made a woman in the crowd faint. Please tell us what the film was about then.
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 16:03, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I would reword "the intense depiction in scenes of the treatment from the kidnappers to the victims" to "the intense depiction in scenes of the treatment of the victims by the kidnappers".--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:49, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I just reworded it. --Gunt50 (talk) 20:43, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Why is this set off with commas?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:56, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I erased the commas --Gunt50 (talk) 21:02, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • which filming took place in fall 2010 -> which filmed in fall 2010
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:26, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:26, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I would reword "Other of her" to "Her other". You will also want to tag this with {{asof}} so that this is flagged for updating.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:49, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Done --Gunt50 (talk) 20:51, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Theatre
Awards and honours
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:41, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I erased the ]]. Was that it, champ? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gunt50 (talk • contribs) 20:54, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Personal life
  • No need for redundant links for The Shape of Things
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:40, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Still linked once too often in the article--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:52, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I unlinked the one in the Theatre section--Gunt50 (talk) 20:58, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Done--Gduwen (talk) 00:39, 8 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

GA review (see here for criteria)

This is a quality article that is on its way to FA. In order to make it there will need to be prose expansion to give the article more than a filmography chronology feel. More critical review will be needed.

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    Needs more critical review of roles. See Clint Eastwood or Kate Winslet, which are two I have reviewed, for example. Technically, nothing is missing from the article because the basic element of each role is put forth in an encyclopedic manner, but the reader really should be given more.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    Both images need {{personality rights}} tags. The latter image needs WP:CAPTION tweaking because it is not a full sentence and thus should not end with a period.
    Both are wrong now. Read WP:CAPTION#wording. If it is not a full sentence, it should not end in a period.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:33, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Both are now correct.--Gduwen (talk) 01:52, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    On hold
Additional outstanding issues

Everything is looking good for WP:GA. I will pass it now. For FA you will want to add more critical commentary and of course, keep it up to date. You did well at responding. I was glad to give this one some attention.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:47, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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