Talk:Pilot (Breaking Bad)

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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Meta discussion

  • Hello, Some Dude From North Carolina. I will be the one to review this nomination, which I will present shortly. Hopefully, my feedback will be helpful. Tayi Arajakate Talk 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Some Dude From North Carolina, hey, so I've completed the review and the article is more or less a good article. There are a few minor issues which might need resolving so I'm putting it on hold for the time being. Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:20, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Some Dude From North Carolina, I have looked over the changes and congratulations on getting this article to the status of a good article. I'll be passing it now. Tayi Arajakate Talk 20:08, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Assessment

  1. Comprehension: The article is well written.
    2. Pass Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) There are some minor issues with prose. See comments below. (Resolved) Pass Pass
    (b) (MoS) The article is compliant with the manual of style. Pass Pass
  2. Verifiability: The article is verifiable.
    3. Pass Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (references) The article has appropiate in-line citations and a list of references Pass Pass
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) Sources used are reliable. Pass Pass
    (c) (original research) No original research found. Pass Pass
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism) No copyright issues found, quotations are attributed. Pass Pass
  3. Comprehensiveness: The article is adequate in its comprehensiveness.
    4. Pass Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (major aspects) The article covers all major aspects. Two potential issues found, see last two points in the comments. (Resolved) Pass Pass
    (b) (focused) The article is on topic. Pass Pass
  4. Neutrality: The article is neutral.
    5. Pass Pass
    Notes Result
    No issues found concerning neutrality. Pass Pass
  5. Stability: The article is adequately stable.
    6. Pass Pass
    Notes Result
    The article is not the subject of any content disputes, edit warring or major changes at present. Pass Pass
  6. Illustration: The article is well illustrated.
    7. Pass Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) The representational image has valid fair use rationale. Pass Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) One clarification needed. (Resolved) Pass Pass

Comments

  • Question about the image caption. It's been a long time since I saw the episode but is the caption accurate? As far as I remember, the trailer implied that he was preparing to confront the police but wasn't he simply preparing his gun to shoot himself? Tayi Arajakate Talk 06:59, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Tayi Arajakate: Well, in the episode, Walter White points his gun towards the sounds of the sirens, questions this decision and attempts to commit suicide, and then points the gun again towards the sirens. I would say that per the timeline of the events, the caption is accurate. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Suggestions:
  • The sentence "Jesse drives back to show his distributor, Krazy-8 but encounters Krazy-8's cousin, Emilio Koyama, who believes Jesse set him up during the drug bust." is a bit awkward. I would suggest either removing "show" or adding "to show the product to his distributor".
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The sentence "However, The Hollywood Reporter revealed that same year that the pilot had in fact been watched by 1.41 million people instead." is a bit awkward as well. For instance the phrase "that same year that the pilot", it should also clarify that it was later in the same year.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The quotations could be turned down a bit, for instance at the beginning of the section on production. Some of them could be re-worked as sentences narrating what Gilligan says instead of direct quotes.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last paragraph is a bit too blue link intensive. Maybe it can be re-worked in a chart format.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The part referred to in the caption should be included in the plot too.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article could talk a bit more about RJ Mitte's casting if that is available and if there is other information available about the production.
 Done Added information on the casting of Aaron Paul and Dean Norris. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Oops, I meant that for the casting for Jesse Pinkman's role, not that of Walter Jr. Since, you have added it anyways, it's done now. Tayi Arajakate Talk 20:04, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:13, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Tayi Arajakate: All done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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