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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 20:46, 22 November 2015 (UTC)
Comment by Dunkleosteus77
Is this written in British English? If so, place the template {{British English}} to the article's talk pageDone
- Yes, it seems that was how it was started. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:02, 23 November 2015 (UTC)
Put the Classification section at the top, before the Description sectionDone
Try merging the Examples section with the Classification sectionDone
Put the two sections on humans under one section (called Interaction with humans, Humans and lice...) and change the title of Lice and humans to Prehistory, and change Lice in humans society to Modern historyDone
Merge the In history section with the Interaction with humans section (since they both regard humans)
General comments
In the lead, change "nearly 5,000 species of insect" to "...insects"
- If this is British then "...insect" is correct.
In the lead, change "...which include every order of birds, and all the orders of mammals except for..." to "which includes every species of bird and mammal, except for...Done
In the lead, change "Lice are the vectors of diseases..." to "Lice are vectors of diseases..."Done
In the lead, change "pierce their host's skin" to "pierce the host's skin" (this is optional)Done
In the lead, change "has the smallest genome known for an insect" to "...smallest genome of any known insect"Done
In the lead, change "cementing their eggs to hairs or feathers where they are known as 'nits'" to "cementing their eggs, which are known as nits, to hairs or feathers"Done
In the lead, change "They appear in folktales, songs such as The Kilkenny Louse House, and novels such as Finnegans Wake" to "...song, such as... and novels, such as..."(optional)
- Not sure that's an improvement.
In the Description section, change "are retractable into their heads" to "are retractable into their head"; also, do they have multiple mouth parts?Done
- All insects have multiple mouth parts. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:07, 23 November 2015 (UTC)
In the Description section, wikilink "Ischnocera" and "Amblycera"Done
In the Biology section, change "Lice are divided into two groups, sucking lice..." to "Lice are divided into two groups: sucking lice..."Done
In the Biology section, change "...and chewing lice, scavengers..." to "...and chewing lice, which are scavengers...Done
In the Biology section, change "...within a month of hatching" to "...within a month after hatching"Done
In the Ecology section, change "...that dive under the water surface..." to "...that dive under the water..."Done
In the Taxonomy section, do not wikilink "sucking"Done
In the Taxonomy section, wikilink "Austrogonoides" and "Nesiotinus"Done
In the Lice and humans section, wikilink "chimpanzee-hominid divergence" (optional); the article I'm referring to is called "Chimpanzee–human last common ancestor"Done
- In the In literature and folklore section, why is " 'very popular' " in quotes?
- Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)
References
- Add access dates to all refs
- I don't think these are needed when the source is a book or journal article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)
- ref no. 9 specifies page number as "pp. 83–". Please finish
- ref no. 21 specifies journal title as being "Parasitol"; change to "Parasitology"
- ref no. 29, italicize "Pediculus humanus" in the title
- ref no. 29, 30, and 31 currently do not use the template {{cite journal}} (and they should).
- ref no. 41 specifies page number as "180.18-28"; I'm confused what this is supposed to mean
It passes
- Thank you Dunkleosteus77. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:00, 25 November 2015 (UTC)