Talk:Lighter (Nathan Dawe song)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
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Haven't reviewed one of yours for a while; will take this on! --K. Peake 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
- Remove rap house from the infobox per WP:STICKTOSOURCE
Done
- "a guest appearance from" → "a guest appearance by"
Done
- Mention that it was released as a standalone single
Done
Done
- Mention that it was dubbed as mentioned by Promonews
Done
- "and it also reached the" → "and also reached the"
Done
- "stars Nathan Dawe and KSI" → "stars Dawe and KSI"
Done
- "starting out completely" → "though they start out completely"
Done
- "both sports, but improving as" → "both sports but improve as"
Done
- Mention the Top of the Pops performance as that special is notable for the lead
Done
Writing and production
- "wrote and recorded the song" → "wrote and recorded "Lighter""
Done
- The other collaborators mentioned in this sentence are not referenced by the source
Done
- "at the time."" → "at the time"."
Done
- "She had a" → Dawe recalled: "She had a"
Done
- "They sent the song to" → "She sent the song to"
Done
- Remove introduction to who Dawe is since we have already done this in the lead
Done
- "wished him luck" → "wished [him] luck" because the quote does not say that
Done
- Target single to Single (music)
Done
- Remove the commas around "Flowers" and add the release year in brackets
Done
- "which featured British rapper" → "which features British rapper"
Done
- Remove introduction to who KSI is per my earlier comment, but keep the target
Done
- "He explained, "It took me" → "He explained that "it took [him]"
Done
- "write the verse."" → "write the verse"." per MOS:QUOTE
Done
- Remove target on fan base
Done
- "feel-good vibe"." → "feel-good vibe.""
Done
Music and lyrics
- Remove target on rap since the term does not always refer to hip hop
Done
Done
- The second sentence is unsourced
Done
Release and promotion
- Remove target on single
Done
- "and the song was" → "and "Lighter" was"
Done
- No source is added for the digital download and streaming release
Not done use a ref name from the release history table --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- Why are the Atlantic and Warner labels listed differently in the body than in the infobox and lead?
Done
- Target live streamed to Livestreaming
Done
- Move the other live performances to being after this one in the same para
Done
- Target acoustic to Acoustic music
Done
- Remove "on 28 August" since we can tell that's the release date
Done
Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- "This version credits" → "The version credits"
Done
- Remove "instead of his verse..." because the brand new part is too similar to that
Done
- "for the acoustic version of the song" → "for the acoustic version"
Done
- "which features new verses" → "that features new verses"
Done
- "on 21 September 2020. A remix by" → "on 21 September, while one by"
Done
Partly done you missed the removal of the year --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
Critical reception
- Retitle to Reception, as this will be more than reviews
Done
- Mention that it was dubbed as such by the staff of Promonews
Done
- Sure you can't add any more reviews; this is awfully short right now?
Done
- Remove wikilink on piano
Done
- Add the accolade as a separate para here to split from reviews
Done
Partly done you forgot to place in a separate para --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
Music video
- "The music video was" → "The video was"
Done
- "The group challenge each other to" → "KSI challenges his fellow group members to"
Done
- Remove wikilink on basketball
Done
- Remove target on football
Done
Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- "a bloopers video, released" → "a bloopers video being released"
Done
- "on 14 August 2020." → "one week later."
Done
Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
- Italicise Promonews
Done
Commercial performance
- "both artists' first song" → "both Dawe and KSI's first song"
Done
- "The song spent a total" → "It lasted for a total"
Done
- Remove the 26 weeks part since that is not sourced
Done
Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- "40th-highest-selling and the 32nd-most-downloaded" → "40th highest-selling and 32nd most-downloaded"
Done
- Only [29] is needed at the end of the sentence
Done
- "The song also debuted" → "The song further debuted"
Done
Live performances
- Since the number of performances here is only two, move to release and promotion like what I said earlier
Done
Accolades
- Write one in prose since this is only one award; hence the move to reception because a section is not needed
Done
Credits and personnel
- Change KSI's vocals to featured artist, plus swap with songwriter in the order and he should be after Tre Jean-Marie
- Ella Henderson should be one below KSI and swap vocals with songwriter in the order
Done
Partly done you should follow songwriter with vocals in the personnel's respective credits --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
Charts
Weekly charts
- Wikilink Billboard Global Excl. U.S.
Done
Not done see MOS:LINK2SECT --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
Year-end charts
- Good
Certifications
- Good
Release history
- Again, which version of the labels listed is correct?
Done
See also
- Good
References
- Copyvio score looks pretty good at 25.4%; ignore the flagged URL because that is not cited anywhere here
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Done
- Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead for refs 1, 27 and 36
Done
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 3
Done
- Cite Capital FM as publisher instead for ref 4
Done
- Cite last name followed by first for Nathan Dawe on refs 7, 8, 11, 12 and 19
Done
- Do this for ref 9 as well but fix MOS:CAPS issues too
Done
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 14 and cite GRM Daily as publisher instead
Done
- Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 18
Done
- Cite Tidal as publisher instead for ref 38
Done
- Cite Ultratop as publisher instead for ref 39
Done
- WP:OVERLINK of Radiomonitor on ref 45
Done
- Cite Apple Music as publisher instead for refs 50, 52, 53, 54 and 55, plus remove Spotify since it is unreliable and replace with other AM citations
Done
Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- WP:OVERLINK of Capital FM on ref 51
Done
External links
- Good
Final comments and verdict
On hold until all of the issues are fixed; your writing skills are improving but I have noticed throughout these reviews that you do not add enough info to comp. --K. Peake 17:46, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
- Timwikisidemen You have still not removed the introductions to who KSI and Dawe are in the opening section, nor have you added "Dawe recalled" in the area I suggested or removed the verse-chorus form unsourced sentence. These are changes I have already noticed you've missed; fix these and check through to make sure you haven't forgotten even more. --K. Peake 07:52, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- Timwikisidemen I had a look through and planked the respective partly and not done templates on anywhere changes are still required. --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- Timwikisidemen Thank you for all of the fixes you have made, I advise to look through all of the suggested changes more than once in the future to check you have definitely done them. ✓ Pass, but I did copy edit slightly where some issues remain! --K. Peake 20:44, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- Timwikisidemen I had a look through and planked the respective partly and not done templates on anywhere changes are still required. --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
- Timwikisidemen You have still not removed the introductions to who KSI and Dawe are in the opening section, nor have you added "Dawe recalled" in the area I suggested or removed the verse-chorus form unsourced sentence. These are changes I have already noticed you've missed; fix these and check through to make sure you haven't forgotten even more. --K. Peake 07:52, 28 January 2021 (UTC)