Talk:Kenneth Strong/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JonCatalán^(Talk) 23:33, 10 October 2010 (UTC)

Comments:

• I did some copyediting, at varying degrees, throughout the text. Generally, it is good, although I would look for slightly incorrect word usage (for example, some verbs have incorrect endings).
• As per above, a lot of incorrect words that result from quick typing—understandable, but for future reference (when preparing this article for A-class, or even FA-class) keep a look out for those.
• "Smith and Strong, representing SHAEF, along with Major General Ivan Susloparov, representing the USSR, Prince Bernhard of Lippe-Biesterfeld, representing the Dutch government, and Major General Sir Francis de Guingand, from 21st Army Group, met with Seyss-Inquart in the Dutch village of Achterveld on 30 April. " → This is a very complex sentence... I think it would read better if you replaced part of it as follows, "... along with Soviet representative Major General Ivan Susloparov, Dutch representative Prince Bernhard of Lippe-Biesterfeld...". That way there are not so many commas breaking up the sentence, and making it very difficult to read.
• "Unfortunately, both were written before the Ultra secret was revealed in 1974." → Why is this unfortunate? What is the relation?
• Language is clear and concise enough. If looking to go to A-class and/or FAC, I'd suggest asking someone for a quick copyedit, as per above.
• Article is stable.
• Referencing is fine.
• Images check out.

JonCatalán^(Talk) 23:54, 10 October 2010 (UTC)