Talk:Juwan Howard/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 19:26, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Due to the size of the article and a lack of time on my end over the next couple days, I will split this review into sections.

Lead/High school

College

  • "In November 2003, Mitch Albom released his book Fab Five: Basketball, trash talk, the American Dream chronicling the recruiting of and first two years of play of the Fab Five" anything notable from the book to add in here? The insertion of this seems jarring and out of place, and is probably not needed, though interesting.
  • "Howard earned the regional MVP award with a game-high 30 points and 13 rebounds despite collecting 2 fouls in the first 2 minutes in the Elite Eight round" numbers under 10 should be written out.

Washington

  • "Howard's hometown Bulls' second game of the season was as host to the Bullets who did not sign Howard right away." feels trivial, could probably be removed.
  • "In the offseason, the Bullets traded Chapman, MacLean and Duckworth.[107][108][109] They drafted Rasheed Wallace." sentences can be combined.
  • "Nonetheless, 1995–96 was Howard's best season. During the season, he finished 3rd in the NBA in minutes played, 6th in points scored and 10th in points per game (22.1)." not the best use of the word 'nonetheless', a different word can be used, and those sentences can be combined.
  • "Averaging 22.1 points, 8.1 rebounds and 4.4 assists, he was named to the All-Star team for the only time in his career." you mention the only all-star appearance already, making this redundant; reword.
  • "The league ruled on August 5, that the Bullets could resign Howard after having renounced his rights on July 15 to free up cap room to sign Tracy Murray and Lorenzo Williams if they forfeited their 1997 NBA Draft first-round selection rights." this should come before noting that he signed then, plus the first comma isn't needed.
  • "The contract made Howard the first NBA player to sign a $100 million contract." mention this earlier, so not needed.

Post-Washington

  • Reiterating that in most cases, number under 10 are spelled out. I fixed these myself where it was needed, but left the final few paragraphs of 07-present unfinished.
  • "2004–05 season he accumulated 7 double doubles, 0 30-point performances and 0 15-rebound performances in 61 games (47 starts),[" we can probably just take out those nonexistent 30-point/15-rebound type performances, no reason to keep them in. Same for in a later paragraph.
  • "Howard had terms agreed to with the" change to 'had agreed to terms with the'

Other sections

  • "His biological father was Leroy Watson, Jr., who wanted to name Howard Leroy III, but his maternal grandmother.." 'to name him', I'm sure you mean.

Misc/refs

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