Talk:Dry shampoo

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 1 April 2019 and 7 June 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Xinruib, Mtang19, Sydykim8. Peer reviewers: Rauscha, 1,1,2,3,5,8-BelaC, Tgb005.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:20, 17 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review (Andrea)

So far, this article looks pretty good. One suggestion I would make for your introduction is that you consider either cutting out or re-ordering the 17% statistic, as it doesn't seem to fit smoothly into the introduction and feels unnecessary. For the history section, I would consider re-ordering your events. It might be a good idea to organize them chronologically: late 15th-century, and then 1700s, and then 1940s. The composition and types of dry shampoo sections look good. Overall, this is a solid start. Your section ordering seems logical. I would go through and touch up on some of the grammar and sentence structure to make everything flow smoothly, but otherwise I think this looks good.

Rauscha (talk) 03:08, 23 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review (Mandy Chen)

This article contains various relevant information that are worded in ways easy to understand. The only thing I would fix would be to trim the introduction a little bit so it is not too long. Maybe sort some of the information there into existing or other new sections? Otherwise, good job!

Tgb005 (talk) 04:02, 23 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review (Izabela Carpenter)

This article looks pretty solid as of right now, but I have some ideas for changes to improve clarity. The line 'so the hair may appear clean but feel clean to the user' is a bit confusing, and could be clarified with some base word choice changes. For the History section I would arrange the information sequentially, clay powder before Minipoo etc., to give a better sense of flow. Finally, I would highly suggest adding the structure of the composition molecules, and images of dry shampoo to both give the reader a more comprehensive understanding about how dry shampoo works and to add visual interest to the page.

"Proper application"

This section appears to violate WP:NOTHOWTO. --Craig (t|c) 07:49, 21 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]