Talk:Cyclone Sagar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 18:17, 3 December 2018 (UTC)

Will do. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:17, 3 December 2018 (UTC)

• When did Sagar become a tropical storm? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Added. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "making landfall over northwestern Somalia." why link those now and not in the first sentence? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Why not indeed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "Sagar weakened into a remnant low on May 21. " infobox says May 20. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Eek, thanks. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "The storm also made the westernmost landfall in the North Indian Ocean," something about this bothers me... it's weird to say a system is the westernmost landfall in a given ocean. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)+

• Better? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "Along its rare trajectory through the Gulf of Aden, Cyclonic Storm Sagar dropped rainfall in portions of coastal Yemen, northern Somalia, Djibouti, and Ethiopia.[15]" Yemen shouldn't be linked twice in the body. I mean this is an understanable mistake considering you did the impact first but still it id already linked in the MH. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Removed the one mention. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "The storm first affected Yemen's Socotra Island." two things. One, this is a dumpy sentence that could be combined with the previous sentence. Second,same overlinking problem applies here. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Done. (insert poop emoji) ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "Yemen's temporary capital Aden was hit by strong winds as tropical cyclone Sagar approached, prompting authorities to a call on residents to evacuate areas near the shore in the southern port city.[16]" and here too. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• De-link. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "The United Nations pledged $2.7 million" I assume this is USD, right? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• I assume so as well, but the source doesn't specify. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• "Norway sent kr30 million to Somalia after Sagar, continuing the humanitarian assistance the country began in 2017.[42]" missing a "that" before "began". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 08:02, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Got that. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

• • @Hurricanehink: Did you miss this on your watchlist or just forgot or did you stop stalking my contribs? :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:38, 31 December 2018 (UTC)

• • Missed it on my watchlist. I saw when you claimed it but not the review, since I've been busy. Can I have a few more days? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:47, 31 December 2018 (UTC)

• • Of course lol I almost never fail GANs. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:49, 31 December 2018 (UTC)

@Yellow Evan: - how is it now? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:37, 2 January 2019 (UTC)

I'll pass this as soon as I save my edit. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 06:47, 2 January 2019 (UTC)