Talk:Confessions (Usher album)/GA1

GA review 1

• "in its first week, the most copies ever sold in a week" - repetition (a week)...can you reword
  • Changed one instance of week to debut. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "dominate the chart." - should that be plural?
  • Ahm, sounds awkward. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "A classic R&B album" - NPOV, does anyone actually call it this?
  • Its the opinion of Usher himself and the producers but I removed it. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "claimed the record his story." - missing word? The record is his story?
  • Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "Usher "didn't look too far" when he started working on Confessions." - I don't get what this is trying to say...
  • Copy edited. Please re-check. Im not sure. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "to give the new record with personal touch" - huh?
  • This is funny sentence. Changed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "thought of doing it would let the people knew Usher introspectively" - huh again? this is sometimes very unclear
  • Yes! I was thinking this before. This word doesn't fit. Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "For instance, "Burn" was built around a situation like that of its lyrics" - that tells nothing to someone who hasn't heard the song
  • Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "Same through with the supposedly title track "Confessions Part II", they were conversing and its concept was written down" - same again (and second word appears to be a typo, and comma should be semicolon)
  • Which one? Fixed semicolon. Added info bout the lyrics/concept. (Actually its supported in the following lines but to not break the story, I put it in here, as suggested.) --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "When "Yeah!" came in, however, Usher and the label were plagued by marketing strategies" - the however makes no sense at the start of the section
  • Yah. Removed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• Early reaction and lyrical interpretation section needs a good copyedit...
  • I'll to try contact someone while doing my thing. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "Although songs like "Burn" is a reference to his dying relationship with Chilli" - were there any other Chilli-related songs, or just that one?
  • There is. For instance, "Truth Hurts". --Efe (talk) 07:50, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "prevented it to happen" - prevented it from happening would read better I think
  • As suggested. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "With strategies to keep the album boosts its sales" - huh?
  • Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "However, it actually began when American R&B and soul singer Alicia Keys, who is featured on the track, that "brought in that the talk of repackaging started"" - rmv "that"
  • REmoved. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• "The success of the album has put Usher in the mainstream for becoming the biggest artist of the year" - needs past tense
  • Changed to "The success of the album put Usher in the mainstream, becoming the biggest artist of 2004." --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
• More critical response (what reviewers said) would be good
  • I'll look for some. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
    • Oh my, i missed all the fun! ;-)Realist² (Come Speak To Me) 15:09, 25 May 2008 (UTC)