Talk:Boletus abruptibulbus/GA1

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Reviewer: Jimfbleak (talk · contribs) 08:39, 17 March 2013 (UTC)

OK, I've had a read now, obviously pretty good, but some quibbles Jimfbleak - talk to me? 09:03, 17 March 2013 (UTC)

• The lead seems a little short at just over three lines, even for a relatively small article. Nothing else worth mentioning there? Also, with so few words, should be able to avoid repeat of "known".

Added a couple of sentences, and removed a "known". Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• The specific epithet abruptibulbus refers to the shape of the bulb at the base of the stem — what does the abrupti- part of the specific name mean?

• Added. Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• The cap margin is curved inward when young, but becomes curved downward when mature. — any way to avoid repeat of "curved"?

• Now "bent". Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• a "pleasant" odor — not sure about the quote marks, is it pleasant or not?

• Hmm, I tend to put words that are subjective opinions in quote marks, but I suppose it doesn't lose anything without. Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• The stem is solid (i.e., not hollow) — stating the obvious?

• Not sure if it's quite that obvious: normally, the word means "firm" or "stable"; in mycological jargon it specifically means "a stem that is not hollow". Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• A dilute solution (12%) of ammonium hydroxide (NH4OH) — I'd much prefer ammonia (NH3) solution, since less than one percent of the dissolved ammonia is in the form you give, see the ammonium hydroxide article

• I changed it to "A drop of dilute ammonia (as a 12% NH₄OH solution) placed", as the source says "With 12% of aqueous solution of ammonia (NH₄OH)", does this work? Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• I'd prefer it without the dubious formula, but no big deal Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:58, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• mounted in a dilute potassium hydroxide — can you mount something in a solution?

• Sounds odd, but it's standard usage. I linked this to Microscope slide#Mounting to clarify. Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• 5–7.2 µm, 7.2–9 µm — unless there is a reason why one end of the range is less accurate than the other, should be 5.0-7.2 and 7.2-9.0

• The source gives them this way, but I suspect it's just poor copyediting on their part, as their ± errors are a minimum of 2 sig figs. Added zeros. Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

• relatively unique — ???

• Changed to "distinctive". Thanks for reviewing! Sasata (talk) 04:31, 18 March 2013 (UTC)

OK, that was fairly painless
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3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

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7. Overall:

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