Talk:Angel in Realtime/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:46, 4 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):
    b. (citations to reliable sources):
    c. (OR):
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):
    b. (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

This will run over the course of two days! --K. Peake 08:46, 4 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • Use bullet points instead of hlist per Template:Infobox song
  • None of the genres are directly sourced in the body
  • Add the ref(s) in the lead to support the album being stylized as such
  • "the record lyrically focuses" → "the album lyrically focuses"
  • "Therefore, Angel in Realtime makes consistent usage" → "Therefore, it consistently uses"
  • The Indigenous music is not sourced as being choirs
  • The sonic departure is not sourced either
  • "Nominated for Album of the Year, Best Group" → "It was nominated for Album of the Year, Best Group" moving this to the last sentence of the second para
  • "it won Australian Album of the Year" → "while winning Australian Album of the Year"
  • "by many critics, particularly for its" → "by many critics, who particularly praised its"
  • "with multiple outlets citing it as the band's" → "Multiple outlets recognized the band's" starting a new sentence at this point
  • "issue with its length and" → "issue with the length and"
  • "It appeared on" → "Angel in Realtime appeared on" and list publications this includes
  • "The record was preceded" → "Angel in Realtime was preceded"
  • "from their 2021 EP Total Serene." → "from Gang of Youths' second EP, Total Serene (2021)."
  • "while single "In the Wake of Your Leave"" → "while the third single "In the Wake of Your Leave"" plus this ranking needs to be sourced in the body
  • "as part of the Immolation Tape EP (2022)." → ""as part of the band's following EP, Immolation Tape (2022).""

Background

  • "the band relocated to" → "Gang of Youths relocated to"
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on London
  • Where is this being a surprise to his family sourced exactly?
  • "as Teleso had always" → "as Le'aupepe had always"
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on New Zealand
  • Ditto for Sydney
  • "David and his wife" → "David Le'aupepe and his wife" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
  • Wikilink piano ballad per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "In 2020," → "The following year,"
  • Remove the comma after EP
  • Pipe ARIA Singles Chart to ARIA Charts
  • Apart from the chart position, none of the last four sentences have any info sourced
  • "from the band since" → "from Gang of Youths since their second studio album"

Composition

Production and recording

  • Remove wikilink on London
  • The production on two tracks by the duo is not sourced
  • "Katis had mixed the band's" → "Katis had mixed their"
  • "the rest of the band" → "the other band members"
  • "from Fanshawe's wife to use" → "from David's wife to use"
  • None of the info for "The Man Himself" is sourced
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on Auckland
  • Audio samples look good, apart from the voices interpolation and all "Spirit Boy" comp are not sourced anywhere
  • None of the last para is sourced

Lyricism

  • "Lyrically, a number of tracks" → "Lyrically, many of the tracks"
  • The only vocals and piano part is not sourced
  • "Tracks like "In the Wake of Your Leave" more broadly discuss" → ""In the Wake of Your Leave" more broadly discusses" per the source
  • "Le'aupepe said "I wanted" → "Le'aupepe said: "I wanted"
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on New York City
  • "the frontman explained "it’s called “returner” because" → "the frontman explained, "It's called 'returner' because" per the source
  • "fucking yield returns"." → "fucking yield returns."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences

Release and promotion

  • "the band performed" → "Gang of Youths performed"
  • "Upon the album's release on" → "Upon the release of Angel in Realtime on"
  • Remove pipe on ARIA Albums and decapitalize chart
  • "their second release to do so." → "becoming the band's second release to do so."
  • Shouldn't you also mention the top 10 positions in the UK and Scotland?
  • "The band issued a limited edition" → "They issued a limited edition"
  • Wikilink 7" vinyl per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • The re-recordings are not sourced
  • "Further, Gang of Youths" → "Furthermore, Gang of Youths"
  • "On 5 August, the band" → "On 5 August 2022, the band"

Tour

  • Img looks good!
  • "The band embarked on" → "Gang of Youths embarked on"
  • October to November postponement is not sourced
  • The acoustic quote is not sourced
  • Specify that he is the Australian prime minister
  • Remove overly obvious wikilinks on North America and Europe
  • Place [47] solely at the end of the sentence
  • Remove or replace The Lantern per WP:RSSM
  • "called their Perth show" → "called the band's Perth show"
  • Add the appropriate ref(s) to the table

Critical reception

  • "Metacritic, which assigns a" → "At Metacritic, which assigns a"
  • "awarded the album a score of 76 based on 10 reviews," → "the album received a score of 76 based on 10 reviews." per the generally favorable part sounding like a contradiction
  • "calling it "deeply personal" → "noting it as "deeply personal"
  • "of love and life"." → "of love and life."" per MOS:QUOTE
  • "was the band's best work – Corbin Reiff" → "was the band's best work; Corbin Reiff"
  • "best record yet – one that" → "best record yet ... one that"
  • "however praised its presentation," → "however praised the presentation,"

Accolades

  • Shouldn't you write a summarization of these in prose, i.e. mentioning it was ranked among year-end lists and some of the high ones?
  • Appearances on year-end lists → Year-end lists for Angel in Realtime
  • Double J should not be italicised
  • Ditto for Sputnikmusic

Track listing

  • Shouldn't you write "samples from" and "a sample from" instead?

Personnel

  • I don't think Anuanuraro should be linked

Charts

Weekly charts

  • Good

Year-end charts

  • Year-end chart performance for Angel in Realtime → 2022 year-end chart performance for Angel in Realtime

Release history

  • Cols should not be centered
  • Format → Format(s)
  • Label → Label(s)
  • Separate labels in the same way as formats
  • Add the appropriate refs

References

  • Copyvio score looks pretty good at 36.3%!
  • Only keep the publisher for refs 1, 2, 7, 9, 11, 29, 30, 32, 35, 39, 42 and 50
  • Cite NPR as publisher instead on ref 3
  • Pipe The Telegraph to The Daily Telegraph on ref 4
  • Remove or replace ref 6 per WP:SELFPUB
  • Wikilink NME on ref 8 instead of ref 31
  • What makes ref 14 a reliable source?
  • I am not too sure about Deepest Sighs for refs 17 and 44; only two people appear to be staff
  • Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 19
  • Wikilink Uproxx on ref 20 instead of ref 34
  • Cite Junkee as publisher instead on ref 22 with the wikilink
  • What makes ref 24 a reliable source?
  • Remove or replace ref 25 since it has only one member of staff from what I can see and is informal
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 26 and 27
  • Cite ARIA Charts as publisher instead on ref 36
  • Remove or replace ref 37 since Discogs is unreliable
  • Remove or replace ref 48 per WP:RSSM
  • Cite AllMusic as publisher instead on ref 52
  • Ref 56 is a duplicate of ref 23
  • Only cite Double J on ref 58 and as publisher instead
  • WP:OVERLINK of Exclaim! on ref 60
  • Cite Sputnikmusic as publisher instead on ref 63

Final comments and verdict

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