Talk:2001 American Memorial/GA1

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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 15:43, 15 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Fourth on my "to review" list. Johanna(talk to me!) 15:43, 15 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Johanna: It's been nearly a month; are you still planning to review this? --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 23:41, 9 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Bentvfan54321: Yes I am! The page must have been left off my watchlist or something. I will put up comments as soon as I can. Johanna(talk to me!) 00:48, 13 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Is the infobox file some sort of official image? I can't tell from the file description page.
  • I know absolutely nothing about auto racing, but from the perspective of a casual reader, I can say that I have no idea what "points" are. I'm not sure if it's worth it to briefly explain or not, but just take that into consideration.
  • Points toward the series championship are accumulated by drivers at every race, with the winner receiving the most and the folks at the back receiving very few or none at all, depending on the auto racing series. It's similar to the Premier League if you follow football (soccer) at all. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 12:27, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the September 11 attacks occurred." This is a bit of an awkward construction--perhaps you can change it up a bit.
  • "The series"? Is this what one refers to CART as?
  • General comment: a few files of some of the important drivers of the race might help spruce the article up a little bit.
  • You can't expect readers to remember which day the Thursday of that week was, so replace that with the date.
  • "The pole position went to de Ferran, who..." Restructure this sentence, particularly the latter half.
  • Split refs into two columns.

@Bentvfan54321: Wow! This is really an exemplary article. I really don't have much to say. Clear this up and I'll be happy to pass. Johanna(talk to me!) 02:32, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Johanna: Thanks! I'll see what I can do soon. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 12:08, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]