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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, 12george1! I will be reviewing the article, 1996 Atlantic hurricane season. As is typical of my latest reviews, I will typically copy and paste a portion of the article in question, in italics, followed by my comments and qualms. By default the review is placed on hold for the week, and if problems cannot be fixed by then, the nomination will fail. Since this is a mid-importance season article of the tropical cyclones wikiproject, I will be spotchecking for consistency and precision. Good luck.

P.S. - Ignore the random non-spaces I have, my browser has a tendency to ignore spaces when I copy/paste the stuff from the article. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

General Reminders

Lead

  • "The 1996 Atlantic hurricane season was the first Atlantic hurricane season since 1965 in which every tropical cyclone attained tropical storm intensity." → This should also be somewhere in the body of the article. As for now it is unsourced.
  • "Featuring a total of thirteen named storms, nine hurricanes, and six major hurricanes" → As is typical of WPTC's articles generally 'major hurricane' should be linked to tropical cyclone scales, or a note could be placed indicating what a major hurricane is.
  • "...while the final cyclone, Hurricane Marco dissipated on November 24." → HURDAT, and the storm's section and article, says November 26 as the dissipation date.
  • "The season featured four tropical cyclone landfalls,..." → What? Only four? I counted at least eight. (Bertha, Cesar, Dolly, Fran, just to name a few).
  • "...the highest number produced in a single season since 1961." → I'd also like to see this sourced and in the article as well.
  • "The four most notable tropical cyclone of the season were Hurricanes Bertha,..." → typically in plural form 'hurricanes' is not capitalized.
  • "...causing a total of 12 deaths and $335 million (1996 USD);..." → $335 million what? Bananas?
  • "The system produced severe wind and flooding damage, leading to 113 deaths and $202.96 million in damage." → You repeat 'damage' twice, so you can axe out the first instance of 'damage' in my opinion.

Season summary

Pre-season forecasts

  • According to the Reference #1 it would appear that the CSU forecasted 11 named storms, 7 hurricanes, and 3 major hurricanes, which goes against the table. Also, it never mentions 'December 1995' as the date or time of forecast. And where are you getting the other forecasts from that table? I only see one row for '1996'.
  • What does 'WRC' stand for? It's never stated in the article. Sure, we get 'Weather Research Center' but where's the '(WRC)' that should follow?
  • Lately we've had a source column as well in the season forecast table – perhaps you can try moving the references there instead of in the forecasting consortiums' column.
  • "A normal season as defined by the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration (NOAA), has eleven named storms, of these six reach hurricane strength, and two major hurricanes,..." → Two things. First, add a comma after 'season' if you're going to also place a comma after '(NOAA)'. Issue two – Reference #3 says 12.1 named storms and 2.7 major hurricanes, and these numbers contradict what is stated in the article. Also, these are averages for 1981–2010, so 48.2% of that sample size were of storms occurring after 1996. You might want to find a better source.

Seasonal activity

  • "...which was well above the 1950–2005 average of two per season." → Reference #3 has since been updated so that average is now 1981–2010, not 1950–2005.
  • I'm not sure if Reference #6 is the best source for relaying information that the year's waters were neither in an El Nino or La Nina state. After all, it is just a bunch of blue and red and black numbers, which only state 'warm' and 'cold' episodes for the Pacific. If possible find a better source, though I'm a bit lenient on this.
  • "Seven hurricanes and three tropical storms made landfall during the season..." → Lead says four, I said eight (I'm probably wrong, I just looked at maps), and this says ten total. One of them is wrong, :P
  • "Hurricane Edouard and Hurricane Marco also indirectly caused damage and fatalities, but neither storm made an official landfall." → The season effects table says Edouard caused two deaths and Marco caused 14, none of these were indirect according to that.
  • "Four tropical cyclones formed in October..." → Four? I count three. And if it was really four, then it should be included with August as the most active months of the season.

Storms

  • The '1)' in 'Marco (C1)' in the timeline is clipped off.
  • Category 4 is from 130-156 mph, and Category 3 is from 111-129 mph, both of these ranges disagree with the table.

Tropical Storm Arthur

  • "...Atlantic subtropical ridge." → I can assure you there are many subtropical ridges in the Atlantic, not only one. Also, link it.
  • "...North Carolina with winds of 45 mph (75 km)." → I never knew you could convert raw speed values into distance.
  • Cape Lookout is ambiguous per peer reviewer. That's the only ambiguous linkage in the article, also per that bot.
  • "As the center of Arthur passed 75 miles (120 km)..." → Be consistent with your conversions, it's either miles or mi. I understand you use miles in all cases, but then that would be you'd also have to use 'miles per hour' as well. One of these needs to be fixed. Also, since we're discussing this, you're missing non-breaking spaces here too.
  • "Reference #14 is dead, I suggest finding the updated link again and web-archiving it.
  • "In addition, Arthur also brought precipitation to Georgia and Virginia, though amounts rarely exceeded 3 inches (76 mm)." → Reference #13 says nothing about this.

Hurricane Bertha

  • There's quite a few place names you can link to in the first paragraph of Bertha.
  • "...while located about 500 miles (800 km) east of Cape Verde." → More like 575 miles south of Cape Verde. And yeah, link Cape Verde.
  • "...the western periphery of the subtropical ridge..." → Again, what subtropical ridge?
  • "...towards the north-northeast and re-strengthening." → 'North-northeast' brings it away from North America and towards Atlantic Canada and beyond. I think you mean north-northwest.
  • "...moved up the Mid-Atlantic..." → Make sure you have 'states' after Mid-Atlantic. And yeah, link that too and all the place names in that first paragraph, I could list all of them if I wanted to but I don't want to.
  • "...of which 43 lost their roofs. Many boats were destroyed." → Reference #16 says nothing about these factoids.
  • "Reference #17 is dead. Again, web-archive these storm data links before they expire.
  • "The storm caused 3 deaths in Puerto Rico, 1 direct and 2 indirect." The problem with this is that Reference #16 doesn't explicitly state that they were indirect or direct deaths, just states broadly that there was an automobile incident, killing two, and a surfing incident, killing one. You never know, maybe the winds drove a 2x4 into the automobile and killed the occupants, which would be a direct death. Just saying.
  • "The storm caused numerous power outages and damage 10 homes in Antigua and Barbuda." → Past tense for damage please.
  • Again, Reference #17 is dead so I don't know how to confirm whether the information sourced by it is factually correct.
  • "...with at least 4 destroyed." → This factoid is not supported by Reference #16.

Hurricane Cesar

  • Actually it does. "satellite images indicate that a tropical depression formed from the disturbed weather at 1800 UTC 24 July when the circulation center was moving just to the north of the island of Margarita along the north coast of Venezuela." --12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Either you capitalize the 'the' in 'the Bahamas' or you don't. Be consistent.
  • "...2 of which were from a mudslide in Pueblo Bello." → That's up for grabs. The newspaper only says that it was an avalanche. It could also be a mudslide, landslide, or debris flow.
  • "Strong winds and significant amounts of precipitation lashed the Archipelago of San Andrés, Providencia and Santa Catalina, unroofing 60 homes, resulting in 11 fatalities,..." → Reference #25 says nothing about the unroofing of 60 homes. Also the sentence structure makes it seem like the unroofings caused the deaths per se. You should use 'and' instead of a comma for those factoids.
  • "...and resulting in 800 million COP ($440,00 USD)." → We faced this issue earlier. Again, 800 million in what, bananas? (Hint: It's damage).
  • "...and 40 km (25 mi) of road were destroyed." → What's with the sudden switch to metric first customary last? :P
  • "Costa Rica, river flooding damaged 51 houses and washed away 213 more; 72 bridges were also destroyed. The road network was significantly damaged." → Nothing about 51 damaged houses, nothing about 213 washed away houses, nothing about 72 bridges, and nothing about road networks from Reference #28. Pretty much wrong place wrong ref.
  • Connection timeout for Reference #29. Also, I'm not sure why you have |type=Report when the reference is using the {{cite report}} template. Sounds redundant.
  • "Additionally, 13 people drowned in El Salvador and 2 were killed in Mexico." → According to Reference #30 there's no entry for Cesar in Mexico and how do you know those in El Salvador drowned according to the source? Furthermore, the source states 12 dead in El Salvador, and not 13.
  • "Overall, Cesar caused 113 deaths and $202.96 million in damage." → Not a fan of the reference spam following this sentence. Perhaps you could do something similar to what you did with Reference #7.

That'll be it for now. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Dolly

  • "...while located west-southwest of Jamaica." → Unsourced by Reference #31. That reference only specifies a "south to southwest" (SSW) location before it underwent cyclogenesis.
  • "It strengthened into Tropical Storm Dolly about twelve hours later." → General rule of thumb – never use 'it'.
  • "Later that day or early on August 22,..." → There's only one time that Dolly exits the Yucatan Peninsula so there definitely shouldn't be an 'or'.
  • "It deepened further and was upgraded to a hurricane again at 1200 UTC on August 23;" → Again, don't use 'it'.
  • "Around that time, it struck between Tuxpan, Veracruz and Tampico, Tamaulipas at the same intensity." → You already say that it was 'around that time' so 'at the same intensity' is redundant, after all, it was 'around that time'.
  • "The storm brought heavy rainfall to much of Mexico, peaking at 37.41 inches (950 mm)." → Not sourced by Reference #31.
  • "In Quintana Roo, flooding destroyed a large farm." → According to Dolly's TCR, a lot of farm land was lost. That does not mean it came from one farm.
  • "Throughout Mexico, there were fourteen fatalities reported, seven in Veracruz, three in Nuevo León, and one in Monterrey. " → Actually there were six in Veracruz, three in N.L., and one apiece in Monterrey and Pueblo Viejo.

Hurricane Edouard

  • "The storm remained a major hurricane hurricane for nearly eight days, an unusual occurrence." → Sure, Reference #9 says it lasted for a major for eight days, but never says it was unusual.
  • "Strong waves in New Jersey drowned 2 surfers." → One was a surfer, the other was a boater. They were not both surfers.
  • "In Canada, the storm brought rainfall up to 5.5 inches (140 mm)..." → The reference states 136mm, so you can always be more specific and say 5.35 in (136 mm).

Hurricane Fran

  • "...Tropical Storm Fran on August 27 while 1,036 miles (1,667 km) east of the Lesser Antilles." → Why the sudden specificity in distance here? You round to the nearest 100 in other conversion cases.
  • "However, Fran became less organized due to Hurricane Edouard and weakened back to a tropical storm." → Here's where you can get more specific. You should say Edouard disrupted inflow into Fran.
  • "After moving west-northwestward and then north-northwestward, the storm slowly strengthened." → Did Fran strengthen during this time or only after this time?
  • "At 0000 UTC, Fran peaked as a Category 3 hurricane..." → 0000 UTC on what date?
  • "Early on the following day, the storm made landfall near Cape Fear, North Carolina at the same intensity." → With no indication of date in the last sentence, 'the following day' becomes meaningless.
  • "In South Carolina, the outerbands..." → Space needed between 'outer' and 'bands'.

Tropical Storm Gustav

  • "An area of disturbed weather, accompanied with a low-level cloud circulation,..." → Circulations and vorticities are the result of wind flow, not clouds. As such, 'low-level circulation', not 'low-level cloud circulation'.
  • "...while located about 150 miles (240 km) south of Cape Verde." → No distance is given in Reference #39.
  • "On August 28, the depression began a motion to its northwest due to an approaching trough." → That's one really strange way to say that a depression turned to the northwest. Find a simpler, more concise way to word a change in direction.
  • "At 1200 UTC on August 29, Gustav reached its peak intensity as a 45 mph (75 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 1,005 mbar (29.7 inHg)." → It held the same intensity twelve hours earlier.
  • "Thereafter, the trough that had previously caused the storm's northwestward motion, transitioned into an upper-level low pressure, which increased shear across the region." → Allow me to suggest wording. 'Thereafter, the trough previously causing the storm's northwestward motion transitioned into an upper-level low, increasing shear across the region.']

Hurricane Hortense

  • "On Guadeloupe, damage was most significant to crops, with over 90% of banana plantains destroyed." → It said 50% on the book listed at Reference 45. Couldn't find anything about '90%' on Reference 44 though.
  • "In Dominican Republic..." → Needs a 'the' before 'Dominican'.
  • "Flooding also forced the closure of several roads and impacted 90% of crops in Samaná Province." → Should be 80%, not 90%.
  • "Only minor impact was reported in the Bahamas,..." → The amount of damage on an island cannot be deduced from the recordings of a weather station over two days. Either find another source or change the sentence's desired meaning.

Hurricane Isidore

  • Change 'quasi-stationary well-defined mid- upper-level low pressure area' to 'quasi-stationary mid- to upper-level low pressure area'.

Tropical Storm Josephine

  • "Tropical Depression Ten developed from the remnants of a cold front in the southwestern Gulf of Mexico on October 6." → Not necessarily. The cold front only stalled at a longitude positioned over the Gulf of Mexico; the TCR never states that the front had degenerated into remnants.
  • Reference 53 is a dead link.
  • "...and in Louisiana, high tides flooded roads and stranded residents on Grand Isle." → The source for this, so you should place this later, in the impact paragraph or something, since it is noted that tropical storm intensity was breached after this sentence.

Tropical Storm Kyle

Hurricane Lili

  • "...it was first hurricane to hit the country since Kate in 1985." → Not supported by the Tropical Cyclone Report.
  • "...mostly due to the hurricane's heavy rainfall which totaled 29.41 inches (747 mm)." → It didn't just total, it peaked. Also, where?
  • "After 269,995 people were evacuated in advance of Lili, there were no deaths in the country." → You should state the evacuations beforehand. Then state that no deaths occurred as thanks to evacuations.
  • "...which contributed indirectly to a death when a man in Maine tried driving..." → 'tried driving' to 'tried to drive'.

Tropical Storm Marco

  • "A cold front interacted with several tropical waves and developed into Tropical Depression Thirteen late on November 16," → This makes it sound like the cold front became a depression.
  • "It re-curved eastward and continued to strengthen, briefly became a hurricane on November 20." → Became should be 'becoming'.
  • "The storm turned northeastward toward Hispaniola, but later became nearly stationary and curve eastward, then doubled-back to the west." → 'The storm turned northeastward toward Hispanola, but later became stationary before curing eastward. Afterwards Marco doubled-back to the west. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 21:59, 6 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Storm names

Season effects

References

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