Talk:1981 Benson & Hedges Cup final

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:25, 10 March 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• "won the tournament in 1974" link?
  • Linked. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "finalists in 1979" ditto?
  • Linked. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "Surrey had previously..." probably too many run-ons here, perhaps split.
  • Split. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " 194 runs off their full" prefer "from" to "off" here.
  • Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Need to link "over" in the lead (you link "not out" so probably worth making sure you link all such "cricket jargon").
  • Added an array of links. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "Somerset lost both their openers cheaply" no need to repeat "their", already covered in the previous clause.
  • Removed. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "West Indian, Viv Richards dominated" comma after Richards.
  • Added. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " one-day tournament" probably needs "cricket" in there.
  • Added. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "bowling performance to bowl them" mildly repetitive...
  • You're right, but I'm struggling for an alternative that doesn't sound forced. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
    • I tried one, feel free to revert. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:45, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
      • Eh, that works for me. Harrias ^talk 14:51, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " a Minor Counties team " is that a "combined" minor team like the combined CU/OU team?
  • Yes, clarified. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " The group matches suffered badly from the weather; four of the ten matches" repetitive use of "matches".
  • Switched the second to "games". Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Consistent capitalisation for M(m)inor C(c)ounties.
  • Oops, capitalised throughout. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " once once again" so good they did it once too often.
  • That good. Trimmed. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Link "toss" (per all good Boat Race articles...!)
  • Piped to Donald Trump. Sorry, I mean Toss (cricket). Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "Surrey started slowly; after the first ten overs they were seven for on" slowly?? That's an understatement!
  • It was a different time! Do you know that Brian Langford once bowled his entire allocation without conceding a run? 8 overs, 8 maidens, 0 runs, 0 wickets. That was even earlier though, 1969. And on an outground, so it was probably a bit dodgy. Anyway, did you want a change here, or just a comment? Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
    • No, just a comment. I'm a bit of a hater of slow run rates in one-day cricket...!! The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:45, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " They only added another..." perhaps "They added just another..."
  • Just trimmed "only", to avoid editorialising. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Suddenly struck me that "opener" may also class as "jargon".
  • Piped on first usage (in Route to the final). Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "against Somerset's slower bowlers" probably no need to repeat Somerset.
  • Replaced with "the". Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " bowling of Garner. In all, Garner" quick repeat of Garner.
  • I think it is unavoidable here. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " Scyld Berry described" introduce Berry.
  • Surely everyone knows this writing legend? No? Added clarification. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Could appropriately link "six".
  • Linked both six and four to Boundary (cricket). Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• " dismissed without scoring" could use "for a duck" and link it...
  • I've been told off before for using "a duck", as apparently "it isn't encyclopaedic language". That's FAC for you... Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "remaining.[8][6]" ref order.
  • MOS:REF specifically states that "References need not be moved solely to maintain the chronological order of footnotes as they appear in the article.." But it's no biggie, so fixed. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Probably not worth using * for not out and linking it, keep it to prose when in the prose.
  • Fair point. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "Benson and Hedges" &
  • Yeah, caught four of these altogether. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• I usually use alt text for dagger and asterisk in these kinds of articles.
  • The {{dagger}} template automatically adds alt text. Have switched to the {{asterisk}} template too. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Nice to see the tables are WP:ACCESS-friendly!
• Our article tends to hyphenate "no-ball"...
  • I don't know why, the Laws of Cricket don't. We should probably sort that out. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Link £ and consider inflation.
  • WP:£ says to "Link the first occurrence of lesser-known currencies", I don't think that applies to sterling. I have considered inflation. For some reason, it seems to apply to my shopping, but not my wage... But seriously, I've added a note summarising, how's that? Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Somerset's overall winnings don't add up for me? £9,450?
  • £9,550 in fact. Changed. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• "Benson and Hedges Cup" & again.
  • Caught this above.
• "by 9 wickets" nine.
  • Yup. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
• Could consider Somerset/Surrey CCC categories?
  • Added. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

That's it for me. On hold pending this bunch. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:20, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. I have responded to each point above. Harrias ^talk 12:06, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

Happy with this, so I'm going to promote. Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:59, 12 March 2020 (UTC)