User talk:Brentyn/sandbox
Hello Brentyn,
I am looking forward to reading your entry in this sandbox.
Hi Brent,
For the feedback assignment, one positive comment I have is that I like how you are adding an additional subtopic to expand on the subject to provide more information about the product and for one suggested comment, you can specify if you can buy the product online and or in store. Niphapone Chisouvanh (talk) 04:03, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
This article provides a good definition and explanation of what the product is and the history of it. From this review, the athletes sponsored by Cellucor impressed me because it is interesting what brands sponsor each professional athlete or team. The phrase, "includes various pre-, intra- and post workout supplements," described the subject in a clear way. However, I would suggest to put in a sentence or two of why people want to use this products and what it does to the body as a supplement. By adding this piece of information, it will add a further explanation of why people use this product and the benefits. Also, I would suggest to add a picture or two of the brand logo or product to show a visual of it. Though, the most important part would be to explain impact on the use of Cellucor as a whole. Niphapone Chisouvanh (talk) 19:37, 9 November 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review: 1. First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
- The article explains the benefits or each supplement in an easy to understand way.
- The article also cites the sources correctly.
2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to this article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
- I think you should add more about each supplement and talk about who usually takes them. I would also go more in depth about what they actually do in the body and the long term affects of taking them.
3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve this article?
- I would definitely add more and explain things further in depth.
4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
- I liked the way you divided your categories and I might do that to my article!
Good work so far! --Erikawicher98 (talk) 04:45, 11 November 2016 (UTC)
please go into business source complete or academic search complete and find some articles on the supplements or some aspect of bodybuilding that you can cite for a more scholarly entry.Ctysick (talk) 15:45, 29 November 2016 (UTC)