User talk:Anantvis/sandbox

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Peer review

Hello, I read your changes and additions to this page and I think that you wrote it well. I made the following suggestions based on personal understanding. I hope it helps you.

  • Some contents of the pages lacks references. I think it is necessary to add references to some of the facts raised/stated in the article. Eg: The direct quotation in the 2nd paragraph.
  • Also, it may be better to not rely the entire graph on one single citation.
  • Some words like "harassment" may have strong personal sentimental tendencies.
  • With respect to the 1st bullet, I saw the original section "Environmental regulations" and I'm not sure whether you made any change in the unbolded paragraphs. A little bit mark at the place you've changed would help a lot. Thanks
  • Looks like the second reference seems to link back to the page itself

Delikitty (talk) 22:17, 13 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Hello, I also looked at this article and thought it was well written, very unbiased and professional. I agree with the previous points made by the other fellow editor.

  • Make sure to add references, and hopefully not all from one source
  • Look at the use of capitals, not consistent throughout article especially when referring to policies
  • I was confused a bit with transitions from sentence to sentence. Each point seemed pretty different albeit related. I'm not sure how to improve that but maybe focus on words to fuse ideas.

I know that last point is a little vague but just look at how it flows and how it could be improved. Mdrogotzke (talk) 03:09, 16 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Thank you class mates for the valuable insights, i just want to clarify that only the bolded section at the last represent the additions to the pre existing article section . The content before the bold section is just the pre-existing article and hence the citations have been removed by me while working on the sandbox ,but they exist well with references in the actual wiki article I will definitely try to get more sources to add some information under the Environmental Regulations section Thanks

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