Talk:Snorlax/GA1

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Nominator: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 23:23, 11 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Ca (talk · contribs) 13:52, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

Hi, I will be reviewing this article for the July Backlog Drive! Since I am still new to GA reviewing, only having done 2 reviews prior, an experienced reviewer will also be taking a look. Of course, feel free to raise concerns or ask questions.

Well written?

The article is professionally written and is understandable for most audiences. However, I did find some places that could be improved for clarity and a broader audience.

Lead: Firstly, I feel as if the leading sentence is a bit clunky. I recommend taking out the bit about Pocket Monster, since it is a lesser known expansion of pokemon, and is irrelevant to Snorlax itself.

In its English-language appearances, it was originally voiced by Michael Haigney, Ted Lewis and currently James Carter Cathcart. Does this mean Lewis and Haigney were both voice actors in the original English release or that Lewis came after Haigney?

Conception and characteristics: An earlier design, nicknamed "Kabiin," highly resembles Snorlax and Nishino, and is thus believed to be a beta version of Snorlax. Consider changing "beta" to "earlier" for those unfamiliar with software development terminology.

...appearance or features as a means to make the characters more relatable to American children "as means to" sounds awkward here. How about simply "to"?

...localizer Bill Giese renamed the species Snorlax "renamed" might confuse readers, since the Japanese name stayed the same.

lackadaisical Consider linking this word to wiktionary

via breeding a Snorlax that is holding Full Incense Clarify Full Incense is a in-game item

Appearances: Snorlax is among the handful of Pokemon to possess a unique Z-Move. In Snorlax's case, it can use Pulverizing Pancake as long as it is holding Snorlium Z and knows Giga Impact This is a bit overwhelming for those who didn't play pokemon. How about adding labels like "Snorlax is among the handful of Pokemon to possess a unique attack ability Z-Move. In Snorlax's case, it can use its ability Pulverizing Pancake as long as it is holding the item Snorlium Z and knows the skill Giga Impact"

Promotion and reception: Following earthquakes, Niantic boosted the spawn rates of Snorlax in affected prefectures in order to boost tourism in the area In which game?

A road in Las Vegas was named after Snorlax Recommend wikilinking the city

IGN editor "Pokémon of the Day Chick" Is Pokémon of the Day Chick a series of article or something? Clarification is needed.